City

Dawn. A hand of sunlight spreads

between the hundred-foot pines

pushing pale fingers to the blue-green

ground. The gold ghost eases into

aquamarine as sun-flecked ferns

bounce and curl around a mossy

stump. They make a glowing mist

in the deep viridian shadow. Fists

of mushrooms the color of hot coals

crowd the rotten wood.

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There’s no hard ground here. Each

step sinks a little on centuries of

soft needles and decomposing leaves.

.

The state calls this forest a “cathedral.”

We know it’s a city. In the trail mud, signs

of a busy intersection–bobcat, raccoon and deer–

a bear and her child walked here looking

for a place to eat.

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We’re tourists among the skyscrapers,

clumsy gawkers and picture-takers. We

teeter on the unfamiliar terrain, jostle

past with cameras and bags while

the patiently annoyed residents take

side streets to avoid us.

.

Bird traffic rings and whistles in the

branched canopy as we wander among

the laurel, through its alleys and

walkways.

.

Those who live here marvel and

complain about what it takes to

sustain us: ice cream, fire, electric

guitars.

.

And we strangers on these streets

watch amazed at the inhabitants,

their exotic cuisine and odd habits.

We say it’s beautiful here but “I

could never live in this place–I’d

always be lost.”

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This was submitted for Read Write Poem Prompt #34.

17 Responses to “City”

  1. paisley Says:

    oh this was fun… and so true having lived in touristy type areas the majority of my life… i really liked the visual feel of it,, it was as if i could see the sunlight breaking thru the high branches whilst listening to the rustle of dried needle carpet and the songs from hidden birds……

  2. lissa Says:

    hmm wonderful. loved the details and that last line. i think the best place to live would be a place full of new treasures to find and new adventures to take and get lost in.

  3. Scot Says:

    nice piece…walking through our woods is like walking down a city street, but when I stop (morning is best) and sit quietly and listen–it transforms. You captured this perfectly.

  4. johemmant Says:

    This is wonderful, it completely took me away from my little suburban patch, you really brought the forest to life……love the fists of mushrooms and the ringing, whistling bird traffic. Glad you’re back.

  5. Noah Says:

    This is so vivid. Incredible!

  6. ravenswingpoetry Says:

    Wow. You helped me remember and then made me miss the forest. Awesome write.

    -Nicole

  7. catherine Says:

    The title confused me briefly until I realised the metaphor you were using - a very apt one, I think. I enjoyed your poem

  8. twitches Says:

    Love the contradiction between title and poem, and how you explain it. Lovely images here.

  9. christine Says:

    GReat metaphor of the forest as a city, with humans as foreign tourists. Kind of sad. Seems like we could belong there too, doesn’t it?

    I love the stanza about the sinking, softness of the forest. Lots of beautiful light images.

  10. Crafty Green Poet Says:

    This sums up exactly why i love forests! Lovely

  11. pieceofpie Says:

    that is so true…

  12. Gemma Says:

    Your images are like the bristles of a paintbrush dipping into the moist colours on a palette and daubing them on the canvas! Gorgeous!

  13. gautami tripathy Says:

    You created a perfect piture of city with your words. Glad I read it!

  14. Jenn Says:

    What a fun poem to read! It is a great take on a forest walk. We are the tourists for sure.

    “the patiently annoyed residents take/side streets to avoid us” is a great line. And the last stanza makes me nod in agreement.

  15. Sweet Talking Guy.. Says:

    Those tourists better watch that those hungry bears don’t come looking for food down the main drag.

  16. Pam Says:

    This poem transported me back into the redwood forest that was south of where I lived for a number of years. Thank you.

  17. Brad Says:

    Those opening lines are amazing. I was hooked from the beginning. I look forward to discovering more here.

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