City
Dawn. A hand of sunlight spreads
between the hundred-foot pines
pushing pale fingers to the blue-green
ground. The gold ghost eases into
aquamarine as sun-flecked ferns
bounce and curl around a mossy
stump. They make a glowing mist
in the deep viridian shadow. Fists
of mushrooms the color of hot coals
crowd the rotten wood.
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There’s no hard ground here. Each
step sinks a little on centuries of
soft needles and decomposing leaves.
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The state calls this forest a “cathedral.”
We know it’s a city. In the trail mud, signs
of a busy intersection–bobcat, raccoon and deer–
a bear and her child walked here looking
for a place to eat.
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We’re tourists among the skyscrapers,
clumsy gawkers and picture-takers. We
teeter on the unfamiliar terrain, jostle
past with cameras and bags while
the patiently annoyed residents take
side streets to avoid us.
.
Bird traffic rings and whistles in the
branched canopy as we wander among
the laurel, through its alleys and
walkways.
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Those who live here marvel and
complain about what it takes to
sustain us: ice cream, fire, electric
guitars.
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And we strangers on these streets
watch amazed at the inhabitants,
their exotic cuisine and odd habits.
We say it’s beautiful here but “I
could never live in this place–I’d
always be lost.”
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This was submitted for Read Write Poem Prompt #34.
July 4, 2008 at 8:09 pm
oh this was fun… and so true having lived in touristy type areas the majority of my life… i really liked the visual feel of it,, it was as if i could see the sunlight breaking thru the high branches whilst listening to the rustle of dried needle carpet and the songs from hidden birds……
July 5, 2008 at 1:46 am
hmm wonderful. loved the details and that last line. i think the best place to live would be a place full of new treasures to find and new adventures to take and get lost in.
July 5, 2008 at 11:15 am
nice piece…walking through our woods is like walking down a city street, but when I stop (morning is best) and sit quietly and listen–it transforms. You captured this perfectly.
July 6, 2008 at 12:06 pm
This is wonderful, it completely took me away from my little suburban patch, you really brought the forest to life……love the fists of mushrooms and the ringing, whistling bird traffic. Glad you’re back.
July 6, 2008 at 5:54 pm
This is so vivid. Incredible!
July 6, 2008 at 7:12 pm
Wow. You helped me remember and then made me miss the forest. Awesome write.
-Nicole
July 7, 2008 at 9:18 am
The title confused me briefly until I realised the metaphor you were using - a very apt one, I think. I enjoyed your poem
July 7, 2008 at 1:39 pm
Love the contradiction between title and poem, and how you explain it. Lovely images here.
July 7, 2008 at 3:00 pm
GReat metaphor of the forest as a city, with humans as foreign tourists. Kind of sad. Seems like we could belong there too, doesn’t it?
I love the stanza about the sinking, softness of the forest. Lots of beautiful light images.
July 7, 2008 at 4:46 pm
This sums up exactly why i love forests! Lovely
July 7, 2008 at 9:11 pm
that is so true…
July 8, 2008 at 10:41 am
Your images are like the bristles of a paintbrush dipping into the moist colours on a palette and daubing them on the canvas! Gorgeous!
July 8, 2008 at 1:19 pm
You created a perfect piture of city with your words. Glad I read it!
July 8, 2008 at 5:57 pm
What a fun poem to read! It is a great take on a forest walk. We are the tourists for sure.
“the patiently annoyed residents take/side streets to avoid us” is a great line. And the last stanza makes me nod in agreement.
July 11, 2008 at 6:49 am
Those tourists better watch that those hungry bears don’t come looking for food down the main drag.
July 11, 2008 at 11:44 am
This poem transported me back into the redwood forest that was south of where I lived for a number of years. Thank you.
July 12, 2008 at 11:37 pm
Those opening lines are amazing. I was hooked from the beginning. I look forward to discovering more here.