Resident Expert
This is posted in response to Prompt #35 at Read Write Poem.
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At 2 a.m. on television there was
an ad for some documentary about
the abyss, the very bottom of the sea.
A place so dark the camera was its own
light. You were half asleep on the couch
beside me.
.
The news was on. Between the ups and
downs of clouds and scores was an expert
hired to sell a war. Ideas worth dying for,
the high benefits, low cost, how little the
blood would run.
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He stirred slowly, lifting from the mud,
a deep water beast resentful of the air
and sun. He spoke almost belligerently,
prodded gently as one might tease an
urchin with a stick. His voice, the thick
rumble inside a sub as it scrapes the reef.
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He spoke casually, a lamprey’s
mouth lisping: “People are told to kill
each other all the time.”
After ensuring the state would never be
at fault, the thing retreated to its nest of
chalk and salt.
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Floating in and out of sleep, you
mumbled: “Is this the show about the
ocean? I thought the news was off.”
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Then the anchor spoke over stock
montage: flocks of bombs,
ships the size of cities vying for
turf, happy families tossing
beach balls by the surf.
July 14, 2008 at 8:19 am
Aww that half sleep where everything slips together. I love how you mixed the news cast with a bit of fantasy. And the truth comes from the lamprey. And it seems we get more truth from shows like Colbert Report or The Daily Show than we do the “so-called news”
July 14, 2008 at 12:34 pm
Very nice… I love the oceanic imagery, the disorientation. Wonderful sounds & rhythms throughout: “ups and downs of clouds and scores” is beautiful, the subtle interwoven rhymes of fault and salt, stick and thick, turf and surf.
My favorite line: “A place so dark the camera was its own / light. ” A marvelous line, loaded with power and resonance; I love the deeper layers of meaning here, the entertainment nation at war.
July 14, 2008 at 12:40 pm
Amen, White Rose.
Nathan, I like how you weaved the two programs together in this poem.
-Nicole
July 14, 2008 at 12:59 pm
This is like a slide show of images! And I like the tiny bits of rhyme!
July 14, 2008 at 1:11 pm
I felt like the heart of the poem was: “A place so dark the camera was its own/light.” This is very well-constructed; the sea documentary and the proclamation of war blending together seamlessly; really well done. So many good lines here, but in particular I like: “the thing retreated to its nest of/chalk and salt.”
July 14, 2008 at 3:22 pm
Powerful characterisation of the loathesome expert!
July 14, 2008 at 3:46 pm
as i was reading, it occurred to me that reading down the lines of a poem is very much like floating to the bottom of an ocean cavern … so poetic verse/poem fits the concept (getting to the bottom of something, what’s below/beneath) well!
July 14, 2008 at 7:21 pm
Nathan…There is a hole in the human spirit, the soul’s deep abyss where the evil monsters of war, deceit, and national mendacity wait. I believe you are one of the few, knowingly or unknowingly, aware of it’s existence. The lines are well crafted. The nature of their candor is spoken with more volume than the lisp of your lamprey. Well done!
DCH
July 14, 2008 at 11:54 pm
A favorite since I have been hanging around here
July 15, 2008 at 3:40 am
This is an insightful commentary on disinformation. The imagery lulls in the way that our media lulls us, so the parallels are perfect to make the point. Nicely done.
July 15, 2008 at 11:06 am
The strong image of the ugly beast reminds me of how much I hate the news.
Great job weaving the 2 together.
July 15, 2008 at 5:38 pm
I like the way things blur into each other here, excellent
July 15, 2008 at 5:42 pm
It really is ridiculous how they sell the twisted wars.
July 15, 2008 at 10:47 pm
abyss of war.. ideas worth dying for.. told to kill all the time.. resentful of air and sea.. 2 in the morning… what else is there… 57 channels and nothing on…
July 16, 2008 at 3:49 pm
I respond to this poem as if it were a dream, very surreal, wonderful images, interesting, the juxtaposition of warmongerers with the dark depths of the ocean.
July 16, 2008 at 8:18 pm
Regardless of what prompted it, this is an amazing poem, the overlapping of the war news and the abyss of the sea, that dreaming state of TV watching when you’re half asleep and confused, and the actual nightmare quality of this particularly absurd and horribly bloody war. The surrealism of it all? You’ve captured it. You should send this one off to be published.
July 16, 2008 at 8:45 pm
Fabulous, loved the line about the camera being its own light; it has beautiful rhythms, wonderful lines. Great one, again.
July 16, 2008 at 9:30 pm
Hey, Nathan, would you go check out the latest post at my place? I’d love you to send us some work……no worries if previously blogged.
July 17, 2008 at 1:30 am
wow this is great. abyss and war.. it’s like all if just a dream far away…
July 17, 2008 at 8:09 pm
i’m not usually fond of rhyming poems but i like how the rhymes–mostly internal ones–work in this poem to make it feel like that in and out of sleep state, and the conflation of ideas that happens then too comes clear
interesting way to engage politics as well!