Resident Expert

This is posted in response to Prompt #35 at Read Write Poem.

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At 2 a.m. on television there was

an ad for some documentary about

the abyss, the very bottom of the sea.

A place so dark the camera was its own

light. You were half asleep on the couch

beside me.

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The news was on. Between the ups and

downs of clouds and scores was an expert

hired to sell a war. Ideas worth dying for,

the high benefits, low cost, how little the

blood would run.

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He stirred slowly, lifting from the mud,

a deep water beast resentful of the air

and sun. He spoke almost belligerently,

prodded gently as one might tease an

urchin with a stick. His voice, the thick

rumble inside a sub as it scrapes the reef.

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He spoke casually, a lamprey’s

mouth lisping: “People are told to kill

each other all the time.”

After ensuring the state would never be

at fault, the thing retreated to its nest of

chalk and salt.

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Floating in and out of sleep, you

mumbled: “Is this the show about the

ocean? I thought the news was off.”

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Then the anchor spoke over stock

montage: flocks of bombs,

ships the size of cities vying for

turf, happy families tossing

beach balls by the surf.

20 Responses to “Resident Expert”

  1. White Rose Says:

    Aww that half sleep where everything slips together. I love how you mixed the news cast with a bit of fantasy. And the truth comes from the lamprey. And it seems we get more truth from shows like Colbert Report or The Daily Show than we do the “so-called news”

  2. durable pigments Says:

    Very nice… I love the oceanic imagery, the disorientation. Wonderful sounds & rhythms throughout: “ups and downs of clouds and scores” is beautiful, the subtle interwoven rhymes of fault and salt, stick and thick, turf and surf.

    My favorite line: “A place so dark the camera was its own / light. ” A marvelous line, loaded with power and resonance; I love the deeper layers of meaning here, the entertainment nation at war.

  3. ravenswingpoetry Says:

    Amen, White Rose.

    Nathan, I like how you weaved the two programs together in this poem.

    -Nicole

  4. Linda Jacobs Says:

    This is like a slide show of images! And I like the tiny bits of rhyme!

  5. twitches Says:

    I felt like the heart of the poem was: “A place so dark the camera was its own/light.” This is very well-constructed; the sea documentary and the proclamation of war blending together seamlessly; really well done. So many good lines here, but in particular I like: “the thing retreated to its nest of/chalk and salt.”

  6. lirone Says:

    Powerful characterisation of the loathesome expert!

  7. polkadotwitch Says:

    as i was reading, it occurred to me that reading down the lines of a poem is very much like floating to the bottom of an ocean cavern … so poetic verse/poem fits the concept (getting to the bottom of something, what’s below/beneath) well!

  8. Donald Harbour Says:

    Nathan…There is a hole in the human spirit, the soul’s deep abyss where the evil monsters of war, deceit, and national mendacity wait. I believe you are one of the few, knowingly or unknowingly, aware of it’s existence. The lines are well crafted. The nature of their candor is spoken with more volume than the lisp of your lamprey. Well done!
    DCH

  9. Scot Says:

    A favorite since I have been hanging around here

  10. Katie Says:

    This is an insightful commentary on disinformation. The imagery lulls in the way that our media lulls us, so the parallels are perfect to make the point. Nicely done.

  11. Jenn Says:

    The strong image of the ugly beast reminds me of how much I hate the news.
    Great job weaving the 2 together.

  12. Crafty Green Poet Says:

    I like the way things blur into each other here, excellent

  13. Noah Says:

    It really is ridiculous how they sell the twisted wars.

  14. pieceofpie Says:

    abyss of war.. ideas worth dying for.. told to kill all the time.. resentful of air and sea.. 2 in the morning… what else is there… 57 channels and nothing on…

  15. christine Says:

    I respond to this poem as if it were a dream, very surreal, wonderful images, interesting, the juxtaposition of warmongerers with the dark depths of the ocean.

  16. Writer not Reading Says:

    Regardless of what prompted it, this is an amazing poem, the overlapping of the war news and the abyss of the sea, that dreaming state of TV watching when you’re half asleep and confused, and the actual nightmare quality of this particularly absurd and horribly bloody war. The surrealism of it all? You’ve captured it. You should send this one off to be published.

  17. johemmant Says:

    Fabulous, loved the line about the camera being its own light; it has beautiful rhythms, wonderful lines. Great one, again.

  18. johemmant Says:

    Hey, Nathan, would you go check out the latest post at my place? I’d love you to send us some work……no worries if previously blogged.

  19. Angelica Says:

    wow this is great. abyss and war.. it’s like all if just a dream far away…

  20. artpredator Says:

    i’m not usually fond of rhyming poems but i like how the rhymes–mostly internal ones–work in this poem to make it feel like that in and out of sleep state, and the conflation of ideas that happens then too comes clear

    interesting way to engage politics as well!

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