Plaster is no security.
The protection of brick is pierced.
Eye like a melon
peers in the picture window.
Finger prods the doorway, slips
into the foyer, rubs walls, knocks
a mirror, tips table. Glass crashes, the light
fixture smashes across the ceiling.
The spaniel is furious. She nips
at the fingernail scraping along the floor.
A tongue, like an angry eyeless
thing from the ocean, wipes the inside
of the garage picking up power tools,
old newspapers, cans of paint.
Now the house is spinning in his hands.
Force flattens us against walls.
One of us gets sick, another’s
hit by the falling fan. He
handles us with the certainty
of an automaton. Through
the doorway’s edge, the broken
window, we see the blurred lawn, the distant
street. We see his dark suit, the crimson
silk tie, the rectangular pin
on his lapel.
Fabulous. A terrifying, satisfying read.
Did you go read yet? What happened? Spill.
Ominous, but thrilling too. A mysterious force.
Your language here is so sparse. Each word is made powerful, not just by its meaning, but by how you’ve eliminated all the extra words.
This poem is full of power, terror. It’s the house again! Like the house in our Titanic poem. I’ve been working with the house as a force a lot in my poetry lately. Don’t know why exactly, it just seems to keep popping up.
Although, you have this “he…” He is scary.
I like the lines: Eye like a melon
peers in the picture window.
I saw a painting yesterday, wish I could remember where, of an eye like that…Oh, yeah! Nothing high brow, actually. It was in a book I just bought my daughter, “Pirates Don’t Change Diapers.” Anyway, your lines are so visual.
Great, great poem! Send it out!
eye like a melon–that phrase caught my attention too, made me go back and read again and again
Hey Nathan! You inspired me! I wrote a letter poem in response to this poem. It’s here: When to Call a House a Home
Nathan, I love the movement throughout Security : pierced, prods, slips, rubs, knocks, tips, crashes, smashes, nips, scraping, wipes, picking, spinning, flattens, falling, blurred … it’s a smorgasbord.
Thanks Jo, the reading was great, really we had the best time.
Thanks christine.
Thank you for reading it more than once artpredator. I appreciate that.
Jill, I can’t believe you wrote a response to this. That is so cool. It’s an awesome poem, excellent.
Thanks for reading Michelle.