Always moving, I see every light turn green.
Through clean and shining streets, barely seen,
I never stop but glide like a marble dropped
on a polished floor.
Puppet jumping to the gestures of a hidden hand,
I follow each command to turn
the music up, to keep staring at the comedy
on the portable DVD.
What’s in my suitcase? Cash and caffeine.
I need rest, to stash these used
muscles in some silent room. But I’m confused
and never know my direction.
Fantasies of stillness flash: a backyard afternoon,
an empty museum, the comatose air of the mausoleum.
I find at a crumbling edge an open door,
but stumbling police patrol the stones.
Exhausted, I moan and wish for heavy sleep.
But I keep driving, jealous of those buried bones.
* * *
This is my response to the prompt at Read Write Poem this week. The task was to use rhyme.


30 responses so far ↓
godess // May 21, 2009 at 12:48 pm |
i like this
nathan1313 // May 21, 2009 at 2:49 pm |
Thanks godess.
gautami tripathy // May 21, 2009 at 3:18 pm |
Love the ending!
listen to me
tamra // May 21, 2009 at 4:41 pm |
love the internal rhymes. they give this a nice rhythm that mimics traffic.
Phil Thrift // May 21, 2009 at 10:39 pm |
I see your poems have returned to this blog. I always learn something from them — or try to. Your style and poetry are something I look forward to reading.
dana // May 21, 2009 at 10:50 pm |
Intriguing. The use of rhyme makes the piece sound more like your writing from last summer. “Always moving, I see every light turn green” is an amazing line. There’s a fantastic connection and leap between the introductory clause and the independent clause.
dana // May 21, 2009 at 10:51 pm |
When did you change your header?
nathan1313 // May 21, 2009 at 11:08 pm |
Thanks gautami!
nathan1313 // May 21, 2009 at 11:09 pm |
I love internal rhyme too, tamra.
nathan1313 // May 21, 2009 at 11:10 pm |
Wow, thank you Phil. And yeah, I’m posting my solo work here and my collaborative work at Mutating the Signature.
nathan1313 // May 21, 2009 at 11:12 pm |
Dana, yes, I wrote this in the style of my writing last year. Thank you.
Oh, I changed my header this morning. I thought I should in honor my “return.”
wayne // May 22, 2009 at 12:14 am |
nicely written
SB // May 22, 2009 at 12:51 am |
Very nice! Especially:
… to stash these used
muscles in some silent room.
JennJilks // May 22, 2009 at 1:57 pm |
Yes, there is a place and a time for rhyme!
Gordon Mason // May 22, 2009 at 1:58 pm |
like the shift in where the rhymes and near rhymes take place throughout…reader never knows when its coming which I favour to end line rhyme
nathan // May 22, 2009 at 2:03 pm |
Hey, thanks Wayne.
nathan // May 22, 2009 at 2:04 pm |
Thank you SB.
nathan // May 22, 2009 at 2:05 pm |
There is isn’t there Jenn?
nathan // May 22, 2009 at 2:05 pm |
Gordon, I totally agree with you. I favor internal rhyme too.
Deb // May 22, 2009 at 4:39 pm |
Mmm. (Nice header. Gorgeous, actually. It looks like a planning document, colors like a flag.)
Lots to love, I was intrigued by “Puppet jumping to the gestures of a hidden hand, / I follow each command to turn” and how it flavored the poem front and back. I enjoy finding big concepts in your poems.
nathan // May 22, 2009 at 10:52 pm |
I’m glad you liked my header Deb, but I just changed it! I liked it too (especially that it looks like a planning grid — that is just what I was going for. It’s part of a collection of things I was doing about the suburbs) but I don’t want it to seem to represent the colors of the American flag. Why? I dunno, it’s just a thing I have.
Julie // May 23, 2009 at 11:51 pm |
I always love the music of your work. Yes, the internal rhyme is spectacular. It echoes from one line to the next and leaves that lovely resonance of sound. Excellent ending, too.
nathan // May 24, 2009 at 12:06 am |
Hi Julie! Thanks so much for the kind words.
Deb // May 25, 2009 at 4:43 pm |
I understand the flag color thing.
This header is beautiful, too. Some of my favorite colors. Like the eyes holding them all.
nathan // May 26, 2009 at 4:58 am |
Thank you Deb, I’m glad you like the colors.
nathan // May 26, 2009 at 5:31 am |
Deb, I was driven to change the header again. I think I’ll like this one for more than a week.
Donald Harbour // May 27, 2009 at 2:01 pm |
Well now Nathan! You’ve come to your senses and reopened your Exhaust Fumes and French Fries restaurant of poetry. Bravo! Serve it up.
As for your poem, I too have walked ” the crumbling edge” of ‘Velocity and Obligation’. Thanks for the company and the good work.
nathan // May 28, 2009 at 12:49 pm |
Thanks Donald, but I’m still at Mutating the Signature with Dana too!
holly d // June 4, 2009 at 10:08 pm |
I love when something rhymes, but I don’t notice the rhyme so much…that’s true here…excellent!
nathan // June 5, 2009 at 12:36 pm |
Thanks Holly.